Exercise #11
Nice job in class today! I especially love the pushback and always regret having to move on. This blog is a good way for us to continue thinking and dialoguing about interesting or controversial issues in our course. A few of you were not convinced that 1.2.I #11 is an argument. This is my attempt to convince you. Please feel free to push back:
Here is #11:
Mortality rates for women undergoing early abortions, where the procedure is legal, appear to be as low as or lower than the rates for normal childbirth. Consequently, any interest of the state in protecting the woman from an inherently hazardous procedure, except when it would be equally dangerous for her to forgo it, has largely disappeared.
I am going to rewrite #11 a few different times to help us see what is going on:
This first rewrite simply eliminates non-essential clauses:
Rewrite 1:
Mortality rates for women undergoing early abortions … appear to be as low as or lower than the rates for normal childbirth. Consequently, any interest of the state in protecting the woman from an inherently hazardous procedure … has largely disappeared.
This second rewrite simply strengthens the first statement and the second.
Rewrite 2:
Mortality rates for women undergoing early abortions … [are] as low as … the rates for normal childbirth. Consequently, any interest of the state in protecting the woman from an inherently hazardous procedure … has … disappeared.
This third rewrite replaces some phrases with their intended meaning:
Rewrite 3:
Death rates for women undergoing early abortions … [are] as low as … the rates for normal childbirth. Consequently, any interest of the state in protecting the woman from the dangers of having an abortion … has … disappeared.
This fourth rewrite transforms #11 into a dialogue that, I think, is both natural and makes the argument a bit easier to spot:
Rewrite 4:
Blackmun: Any interest of the state in protecting the woman from the dangers of having an abortion … has … disappeared
Sally: Why do believe that?
Blackmun: Well, the death rates for women undergoing early abortions … [are] as low as … the rates for normal childbirth
So, I think the right thing to say here is that Blackmun is giving Sally a reason for believing that the state should no longer be involved in protecting women from early abortions. If that is correct, then #11 is an argument.
Thoughts?
Kelsey and I have a suggestion for rewrite #5 and want to see what you think about it.
ReplyDeleteAny interest of the state in protecting the woman from the dangers of having an abortion … has … disappeared... because... death rates for women undergoing early abortions... [are] as low as … the rates for normal childbirth.
Would this be a valid way of rewriting #11? For some reason, this makes sense to us as an argument, but rewrite #3 does not. Rewrite #3 sounds like an if/then statement. It sounds like an explanation of why the state's interest in protection women from the hazard of abortion has gone down. In our rewrite, however, it makes sense as an argument...